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Guys if you can check this video out it's called Mixed kids problems and give me some critique or positives :p either way, I already know about the poor video quality and I'm going to try to fix that but yeah thanks in advance

CBlake wrote:Guys if you can check this video out it's called Mixed kids problems and give me some critique or positives :p either way, I already know about the poor video quality and I'm going to try to fix that but yeah thanks in advance

mind posting it here?

What are the kids mixed with?

Phatscotty wrote:

CBlake wrote:Guys if you can check this video out it's called Mixed kids problems and give me some critique or positives :p either way, I already know about the poor video quality and I'm going to try to fix that but yeah thanks in advance

mind posting it here?

Oops sorry edited.

That Red dude looks like AOG

okey

Take out the bit with the weightlifting. I get what you're trying to do, but what you'd need is for you to be showing that to a group, and while the video is playing and you're lovingly lifting the weights, they cringe and you then say the stuff about "how did that get in there".

The way it is now, we know how it got in there. You shot the goddamn video and edited it, and while shooting it had the awareness to call it weird. Completely kills the joke. You have to be sincere and confident about the weightlifting in the video for that to come off.

Remember, with awkward humor like that, the punchline comes in the audience's reaction. That's why The Office always cuts away to Jim making that stupid, "WAT" face.


Otherwise, great start. And good that you're starting with what you know. Keep going back to that well.

nice guns

pimpdave wrote:Take out the bit with the weightlifting. I get what you're trying to do, but what you'd need is for you to be showing that to a group, and while the video is playing and you're lovingly lifting the weights, they cringe and you then say the stuff about "how did that get in there".

The way it is now, we know how it got in there. You shot the goddamn video and edited it, and while shooting it had the awareness to call it weird. Completely kills the joke. You have to be sincere and confident about the weightlifting in the video for that to come off.

Remember, with awkward humor like that, the punchline comes in the audience's reaction. That's why The Office always cuts away to Jim making that stupid, "WAT" face.


Otherwise, great start. And good that you're starting with what you know. Keep going back to that well.

Pimpdave, thank you for the advice, I realize that everyone knows that I shot and edited it and that I did it, which in a way makes it "Stupid Humor" Like something from the movie Hot Rod or something, you are probably too intelligent for this to pass as funny, but thanks I probably will work on that.

Do you get what I'm saying though? The joke works, but the execution fails. For a good cringe worthy moment, the person doing the awkward thing has to be completely confident in what they're doing. By expressing doubt in that moment, you deflate an otherwise full balloon.

You'd have to express the doubt about what's going on in front of an audience that's cringing at the video playing of you doing the weights thing. Then it's hilarious. Get it? But you're copping out on the joke by broadcasting that you're in on it. There's a fine line between clever and douchey.

pimpdave wrote:Do you get what I'm saying though? The joke works, but the execution fails. For a good cringe worthy moment, the person doing the awkward thing has to be completely confident in what they're doing. By expressing doubt in that moment, you deflate an otherwise full balloon.

You'd have to express the doubt about what's going on in front of an audience that's cringing at the video playing of you doing the weights thing. Then it's hilarious. Get it? But you're copping out on the joke by broadcasting that you're in on it. There's a fine line between clever and douchey.

I get ya, but I could hardly call it douchey when my arms are clearly small haha

Thanks again for the advice Dave, I embedded the video now so that should be better.

Very nice.

2dimes wrote:Very nice.

Thanks man

So you don't actually want any advice, you just want affirmation...

CBlake wrote:

pimpdave wrote:Do you get what I'm saying though? The joke works, but the execution fails. For a good cringe worthy moment, the person doing the awkward thing has to be completely confident in what they're doing. By expressing doubt in that moment, you deflate an otherwise full balloon.

You'd have to express the doubt about what's going on in front of an audience that's cringing at the video playing of you doing the weights thing. Then it's hilarious. Get it? But you're copping out on the joke by broadcasting that you're in on it. There's a fine line between clever and douchey.

I get ya, but I could hardly call it douchey when my arms are clearly small haha

It's douchey because you're broadcasting that you're in on the joke. That humor doesn't work when the person doing it is in on it. Whatever, get defensive, you're the one failing. You shout just quit.

pimpdave wrote:

CBlake wrote:

pimpdave wrote:Do you get what I'm saying though? The joke works, but the execution fails. For a good cringe worthy moment, the person doing the awkward thing has to be completely confident in what they're doing. By expressing doubt in that moment, you deflate an otherwise full balloon.

You'd have to express the doubt about what's going on in front of an audience that's cringing at the video playing of you doing the weights thing. Then it's hilarious. Get it? But you're copping out on the joke by broadcasting that you're in on it. There's a fine line between clever and douchey.

I get ya, but I could hardly call it douchey when my arms are clearly small haha

It's douchey because you're broadcasting that you're in on the joke. That humor doesn't work when the person doing it is in on it. Whatever, get defensive then. Your joke was bad, and you are bad at making it. Your video fails as a result. You are thus a failure.

Wasn't getting defensive brah, I was just trying to explain the reasoning, which is a style in which you cannot connect with, thus making you think the way you do about it.

So then tell us why it's so important for you to be in on the joke. Why don't you have the balls enough to commit to the bit?

pimpdave wrote:So then tell us why it's so important for you to be in on the joke. Why don't you have the balls enough to commit to the bit?

I just told you, it is a style of delivery. As if to say everyone knew I edited the video however I put a video of me lifting a baby sized weight with my peanut arms in anyway, It's kind of making fun of douchebaggery, you would have to know the personality of more young people I guess to understand it fully.

So you really are clueless. Good luck with that.


Since this style of delivery is so successful, please show me YT videos with hundreds of thousands of views that have the same delivery as yours. I can't think of any. I can post a hundred right now that follow what I'm suggesting.

If you drop the weightlifting bit, it still works, because you're in on the joke the whole time already. But if you actually took a real risk and threw in a completely cringe worthy moment that comes off as thoroughly sincere, and not the cop out version you already made, your video would reach sublime levels of parody.

PD's right. You, as in your YouTube character, need to remain the butt of your own joke. Milking the awkward moments is where it counts, so it's a matter of delivery.

For example, think of yourself as trolling. You know that you're in on the joke, but making that known is beside the point. The point is to convince others that you don't know--or at the very least, they should wonder: 'don't know if trolling or just stupid.' Inserting some other character or scene--as PD mentions--allows the audience to tune into that desired moment for them to laugh. They connect with that, but your YT character must dissociate itself with that role; otherwise, the joke isn't as good.

Some people don't like doing this because they dislike it when others perceive them in some unfavorable manner. "Gee, that guy really is an douche." If you can't Deal with it.jpg, then good luck with that. If you want to make a funnier YT video, then incorporate PD's advice.

BigBallinStalin wrote:PD's right. You, as in your YouTube character, need to remain the butt of your own joke. Milking the awkward moments is where it counts, so it's a matter of delivery.

For example, think of yourself as trolling. You know that you're in on the joke, but making that known is beside the point. The point is to convince others that you don't know--or at the very least, they should wonder: 'don't know if trolling or just stupid.' Inserting some other character or scene--as PD mentions--allows the audience to tune into that desired moment for them to laugh. They connect with that, but your YT character must dissociate itself with that role; otherwise, the joke isn't as good.

Some people don't like doing this because they dislike it when others perceive them in some unfavorable manner. "Gee, that guy really is an douche." If you can't Deal with it.jpg, then good luck with that. If you want to make a funnier YT video, then incorporate PD's advice.

You guys realize that was 10 seconds of a 3 minute video right? I get what you are both saying but that part is so insignificant and has nothing to do with the actual video, I was honestly looking for critique on other things

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CBlake wrote:

BigBallinStalin wrote:PD's right. You, as in your YouTube character, need to remain the butt of your own joke. Milking the awkward moments is where it counts, so it's a matter of delivery.

For example, think of yourself as trolling. You know that you're in on the joke, but making that known is beside the point. The point is to convince others that you don't know--or at the very least, they should wonder: 'don't know if trolling or just stupid.' Inserting some other character or scene--as PD mentions--allows the audience to tune into that desired moment for them to laugh. They connect with that, but your YT character must dissociate itself with that role; otherwise, the joke isn't as good.

Some people don't like doing this because they dislike it when others perceive them in some unfavorable manner. "Gee, that guy really is an douche." If you can't Deal with it.jpg, then good luck with that. If you want to make a funnier YT video, then incorporate PD's advice.

You guys realize that was 10 seconds of a 3 minute video right? I get what you are both saying but that part is so insignificant and has nothing to do with the actual video, I was honestly looking for critique on other things

Now you've gone from being defensive to making irrelevant excuses. Perhaps you're getting it?